I had been waiting for this moment for years now. I was in the tenth grade at the time and since the sixth grade I was being punished by what I considered to be one of the worst punishments of all time: braces. My braces had been my enemy for five years now and I was more than ready to get them off. Today was the day of my orthodontist appointment and I was going to get those awful things off. I did not, however, want to get my hopes up too high because they had decided to take my braces off before and changed there minds right after. I was really supposed to get them off in eighth grade, but due to my teeth, and I guess due to my lack of dedication to the wearing of the rubber bands, I could not get them off until now. I ensured that everyone in my class knew exactly where I was going before I left school in the middle of third period to experience the event that was surely going to make my life much better. The drive to the doctor's office was intense. I had never been so ready to get something out of my life. We finally arrived at the office.
"Please take a seat, we will be right with you," the lady at the front desk ensured. Like most doctor's appointments, the lady at the front desk lied and I had to wait for at least a half an hour.
"Zach? Great to see you! Come on back," the doctor finally called. I followed the doctor, who I knew very well by that time, to the back of the office where I reclined in a chair that I had been in many times before. She didn't have to tell me what to do; I knew the procedure. I quickly brushed my teeth, threw the glasses on, and sat back down, waiting for her to see my teeth so that she could tell me what I wanted to hear. She asked me to open up and I obliged.
"Uh-oh" she said at last. Two syllables. It only took two syllables to ensure me that I would have the braces for at least another three months. I cannot say that I was too sad though, for I had heard this a few times already, but I was really sure that they would come off this time. It was after hearing this news again that I decided that I would never again go into something without full dedication to it.
This story is easy for anyone who has had braces to relate to. It has some comedic language and situations in it, such as how you make getting your braces off such a big deal and how much emphasis is put on the “Uh oh” moment. However the humor and the importance you place on getting your braces removed makes it easier to relate to for people who had braces. You could use more details to describe the orthodontist’s office and how you felt when you realized you once again were going to have to wait before you could get your braces taken off. You also could take out some of the build-up to the actual visit with the doctor and put more details and description there because that is the most important part but it is kind of a quick ending. Overall though the bits of comedy, the relation a lot of people can feel with the story, and the clear message makes it an easy story to connect to.
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